Simply Haiku: An E-Journal of Haiku and Related Forms
July-August 2004, vol. 2, no.

 

 

The Kamakura Shrine One Verse Competition - English section

 

 

First Prize

the evening rain
in reminiscence--
my back feels wet

thinning watercolors
with Perrier

close of day
the barrage of questions
mom's story hour

First Prize:

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kifu Futagami

thinning watercolors
Chiharu Fukunaga

close of day
the barrage of questions

John Tion Chunghoo

 

 

 

Second Prize

the evening rain
in reminiscence--
my back feels wet

thinning watercolors
with Perrier

hoar frost
the dead spider drawn
into a star

 

First Prize:

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kifu Futagami

thinning watercolors
Chiharu Fukunaga

close of day
the barrage of questions

Sheila Windsor

 

 

 

Third Prize

the evening rain
in reminiscence--
my back feels wet

thinning watercolors
with Perrier

each waterway has
a line of cherry blossoms
going down the stream

 

First Prize:

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kifu Futagami

thinning watercolors
Chiharu Fukunaga

close of day
the barrage of questions

Nobuyuki Yuasa

 

 

 

Runners Up

a path appears
faintly by moonlight
our journey begins

light from
the north-facing window
a model's pale skin

various hues
of hydrangeas skirt the graves...
giggling students

a plume of steam--
blue flames flicker
under the teapot

to a mime,
the make-up artist tells
her secret

scented breeze
jacaranda's blossoms
on the duck's feet

infectious
laughter of a baby
being tickled

after dessert
she passes the waiter
her private number

a brief flash
the sunset bleeds
into the horizon

at sunrise
the camper removes the rocks
from under the tent

computerese
ordinateur, octets
French dictionary

 

First Prize:

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Ray MacKenzie

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Michael Ketchek

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Carmen Sterba

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Carol Raisfeld

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Juanito L. Escareal

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Ron Moss

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kirsty Karkow

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Paul Conneally

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Carol MacRury

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Jeff Whittingham

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Stephan Rojcewicz

 

cat.

a
fai
4ou

th
in
2y

th
in
2&5m

the
in

1

th
in

3

th
in

4

the
in

5

th
in
3my

th
in
1&6

the
in

3my

th
in
1

 

 

Honorable Mention

torrid noon
beads of moisture coat
my ice tea glass

her breath
expands the sun's image
on a bubble

ripples on a puddle
revealing the sound of
silent rain

koi
a living palette
flushes beneath lilies

your brush
dripping with
starlight

morning sun light
an ant's shadow
traces the peony

now stay there
the shape of cherry blossoms
kaleidoscope

spring sunshine
the rainbow trout disappears
in a cloud shadow

clouds
arc of rainbow
there, and there

pastel sunset
skimming the river--
bats

watermirror
Monet's nenuphars
on the pond

 

First Prize:

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Allen McGill

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Christopher Herold

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kuniharu Shimizu

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Brenda Roberts

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Robert Wilson

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Stanford Forrester

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Tateshi Tsukamoto

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Earl Keener

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Dr. Peter H. Pache

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

elehna de sousa

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Marius Geerts

 

cat.

a
fai
1

th
in
1

th
in
1m

the
in

2

th
in

2

th
in

2

the
in

2

th
in
2

th
in
2

the
in

2my

th
in
2

 

beneath the field
the samurai sleep
past the temple bell

the tears fall
as do the raindrops
washing the heart

incense swirls
beneath a tall gingko
our kiss deepens

will the pharmacist
renew your prescription
for coumadin?

carrying my plate outside
to dine
with the weeping cherry

spring breeze
tied to the wind chime cord
a blossom haiku

the slap of my feet
along this stone path
echoes through time

deep forest
I trace a path
I've dreamed

a baby's dimples
plump enough to
make the Buddha grin

our giggles
echo within Spring's garden
where moonlight hides

a faint smile
as a forgotten moment
brings warmth

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Sara Winteridge

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Doug Sterver

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Angelee Deodhar

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Christopher Herold

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

susan delphine delaney

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Stanford Forrester

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Tateshi Tsukamoto

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Kikuyo Sugiura

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

John E. Carley

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Bette Wappner

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Kylie Hooklyn

a
fai
3

th
in
3

th
in
3

the
in

3

th
in

4

th
in

4

the
in

4

th
in
4

th
in
5

the
in

5

th
in
5

 

pull me into
a now painted with
stars

quick as lightning
a gleam comes out of an eye
of a blue heron

between storms
in distant glass towers
lightning

from the canvas
a memory
of moonlight

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Robert Wilson

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Nobuyuki Yuasa

the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Brenda Roberts

the evening rain
in thinning watercolors

Dina E. Cox

a
fai
6

th
in
6

th
in
6

the
in

6

 

 

 

 

A Thank You Note from the Adjudicator

In concluding the contest my heart goes to all contributors; thank you for entering the first One Verse Contest, and for engaging with the tradition of haikai-no-renga.

Unlike a haiku contest, here we shared the same starting point which we found in and between two tiny verses.

I am trying to explain to myself why I am still so touched, not only by the diversity, but also by the patterns recognizable in the way in which the added stanzas seek to develop the poem.

This enthusiasm must be from witnessing, time and again, the sincere endeavour of each individual as they honour their fellow poets through such imaginative attempts to extend the poem.

This whole experience as judge represents the exact opposite to the notion that understanding each other is extremely difficult . . . a notion that seems to be wide-spread in Japan through the recent best-seller: The Wall of Idiots (baka no kabe). The contest affirms that we can understand each other.

My enthusiasm must spring from the confirmation that shared humanity has so much to do with the writing of poetry. Aren't we almost destined to share our precious collage of memory, of dreams and inner vision in this uniquely human way called poetry?

As you will have found from the above results, I could not help categorizing candidate verses into several groups:

  1. poems which give the image of instability, or on-going transformation
  2. poems about visual impact or about imagination triggered by art-related words
  3. poems written by humanizing the scene based on dramatic imagination on human nature
  4. poems on various flowing-out images
  5. poems on laughter (often combined with either to 3 or 4)
  6. poems on sudden insight, impulse or motion

It has been so difficult to select the prizes out of so many well-qualified verses. And yet now I am perfectly firm on my selection.

first prize

I love a delightful shift from pushed out watercolor paints flowing into a tiny Perrier puddle to told-out stories that released 'a barrage of questions'.

second prize

I admire the link between ice-cold Perrier and the dead spider in hoar frost! The vivid image of a spider drawn to a star is poetically convincing.

third prize

The sound of English 5-7-5 is rarely this natural. Here the sound of the poem is effectively and gracefully entwined with the visual image of the verse.

I have also chosen 11 runners up and quite a few verses for honorable mention. I hope you enjoy them as much as I have.

Lastly, let me share with you my own humble try:

 

footpath
along the inlet:
I ran into a handsome boy

 the evening rain
in reminiscence--

Eiko Yachimoto

 

3&4

 

Sincerely yours,
Eiko Yachimoto